[tor-commits] [webwml/master] Reword first paragraph on tor overview

[sebastian at torproject.org]

commit b11d531d31a247025309ff88bcd48ed2c2ce1511
Author: Sebastian Hahn <sebastian at torproject.org>
Date:   Sat Mar 14 03:26:58 2015 +0100

    Reword first paragraph on tor overview
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 about/en/overview.wml |   18 +++++++++++-------
 1 file changed, 11 insertions(+), 7 deletions(-)

diff --git a/about/en/overview.wml b/about/en/overview.wml
index aa3cb56..c275f9f 100644
--- a/about/en/overview.wml
+++ b/about/en/overview.wml
@@ -29,13 +29,17 @@
     <h3><a class="anchor" href="#overview">Overview</a></h3>
 
     <p>
-    Tor is a network of virtual tunnels that allows people and groups to
-    improve their privacy and security on the Internet.  It also enables
-    software developers to create new communication tools
-    with built-in privacy features.  Tor provides the foundation for
-    a range of applications that allow organizations and individuals
-    to share information over public networks without compromising their
-    privacy.
+    The Tor network is a group of <a href="<page
+    getinvolved/volunteer>">volunteer</a>-operated servers that allows people
+    to improve their privacy and security on the Internet. Tor's users employ
+    this network by connecting through a series of virtual tunnels rather than
+    making a direct connection, thus allowing both organizations and
+    individuals to share information over public networks without compromising
+    their privacy. Along the same line, Tor is an effective censorship
+    circumvention tool, allowing its users to reach otherwise blocked
+    destinations or content.  Tor can also be used as a building block for
+    software developers to create new communication tools with built-in privacy
+    features.
     </p>
 
     <p>