[tor-commits] r24678: {projects} Improve style more (projects/articles/browser-privacy)

[Robert Ransom]

Author: rransom
Date: 2011-04-26 15:06:46 +0000 (Tue, 26 Apr 2011)
New Revision: 24678

Modified:
   projects/articles/browser-privacy/W3CIdentity.tex
Log:
Improve style more

Modified: projects/articles/browser-privacy/W3CIdentity.tex
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--- projects/articles/browser-privacy/W3CIdentity.tex	2011-04-26 15:06:06 UTC (rev 24677)
+++ projects/articles/browser-privacy/W3CIdentity.tex	2011-04-26 15:06:46 UTC (rev 24678)
@@ -251,9 +251,9 @@
 the cache to store identifiers. It does this by limiting the scope of the
 cache to the top-level origin in the URL bar. This has the effect that
 commonly sourced content elements are fetched and cached repeatedly, but this
-is the desired property. Each of these prevalent content elements can be
-crafted to include unique identifiers for each user, tracking users who
-attempt to avoid tracking by clearing cookies.
+is necessary to prevent linkability: each of these content elements can be
+crafted to include an identifier unique to each user, thus tracking users who
+attempt to avoid tracking by clearing normal cookies.
 
 The Mozilla development wiki describes an origin model improvement for
 cookie transmission
@@ -266,7 +266,7 @@
 current site.
 % XXXX I can't tell what this paragraph is supposed to mean. --RR
 
-Similarly, one could imagine this two level dual-keyed origin isolation being
+Similarly, one could imagine this two-level dual-keyed origin isolation being
 deployed to improve similar issues with DOM Storage and cryptographic tokens.
 
 Making the origin model for browser identifiers more closely match user