[tor-commits] r24677: {projects} Fix style issues (projects/articles/browser-privacy)

[Robert Ransom]

Author: rransom
Date: 2011-04-26 15:06:06 +0000 (Tue, 26 Apr 2011)
New Revision: 24677

Modified:
   projects/articles/browser-privacy/W3CIdentity.tex
Log:
Fix style issues

Modified: projects/articles/browser-privacy/W3CIdentity.tex
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--- projects/articles/browser-privacy/W3CIdentity.tex	2011-04-26 15:05:12 UTC (rev 24676)
+++ projects/articles/browser-privacy/W3CIdentity.tex	2011-04-26 15:06:06 UTC (rev 24677)
@@ -313,12 +313,16 @@
 standards coordination.
 
 Of the major private browsing modes, Google Chrome's Incognito Mode comes the
-closest to conveying the idea of ``identity'' to the user, and the
+closest to conveying the idea of ``identity'' to the user, and its
 implementation is also simple as a result.  The Incognito Mode window is a
-separate, stylized window that clearly conveys an alternate identity is in use
-for this window, which can be used concurrent to the non-private identity.
-The better UI appears to lead to less mode error (where the user forgets their
-private browsing state) compared to other browsers\cite{private-browsing}.
+separate, stylized window which clearly conveys that an alternate identity
+is in use
+in this window, which can be used concurrently with the non-private identity.
+The better UI appears to lead to less mode error (in which the user forgets
+whether
+private browsing is enabled) than other browsers' private browsing
+modes\cite{private-browsing}.
+% XXXX ‘mode error’?
 
 The Mozilla Weave project appears to be proposing an identity-oriented method
 of managing, syncing, and storing authentication tokens, and also has use